Complaint letter: an electronic item that arrived damaged
A real-format letter task with a band 8 formal letter, the plan behind it, and the phrases worth keeping. Aim for 150 to 190 words in 20 minutes.
The task
Band 8 model answer
176 words. The minimum is 150, and anything under it is penalised on Task Achievement; a strong answer sits between 150 and 190, which leaves time to check the figures.
Why this answer earns band 8
- "Dear Sir or Madam" paired with "Yours faithfully" is the correct formal convention for an unnamed recipient, the first thing Task Achievement checks in a letter.
- "order number 44812, which I bought from your website on 3 March" gives the reader everything they need to act, and detail like this is what makes a complaint credible rather than angry.
- "This has been more than an inconvenience" opens the second bullet with a sentence that announces its purpose, so the three bullets land in three clearly separated paragraphs, which is Coherence and Cohesion.
- "I would like you to send a replacement ... If a replacement is not available, please refund" states a request and a fallback, the Task Achievement move that shows the writer has thought the situation through.
- "cuts out after a few minutes", "at no cost to me", "within seven days" are precise, natural collocations under Lexical Resource, and the letter never once uses "very".
The plan, reusable on any letter of this kind
- Opening (1 sentence): why you are writing, with the item, the order reference and the dates.
- Bullet 1 (40-50 words): what is wrong, in specific physical detail.
- Bullet 2 (40-50 words): the effect on you, one concrete example, no exaggeration.
- Bullet 3 (50-60 words): exactly what you want, with a deadline and a fallback, then a formal close.
Phrases worth learning
| I am writing about | the plainest formal opening; better than "I am writing to complain" because it states the subject first |
| cannot be used as intended | to describe a fault without technical vocabulary |
| This has been more than an inconvenience | to introduce the effect on you in a formal register |
| at no cost to me | in any request for a replacement, repair or collection |
| I look forward to your reply | the standard formal closing line before the sign-off |
The names, order number and dates are invented for the model, which is exactly what you should do in the exam: the examiner rewards specific, plausible detail and never checks it.
Questions about this answer
What band is this model answer?
It is written to band 8, and the notes under it quote the answer's own words to show why.
How long should a Task 1 answer be?
Aim for 150 to 190 words in 20 minutes. This model answer is 176 words, and anything under 150 is penalised on Task Achievement.
What is the most common mistake on Task 1?
Writing under the 150 word minimum, which is penalised on Task Achievement, or missing one of the three bullet points.